Category Archives: examples of good writing

effective transitions

 

‘Piedmont People’

PIEDMONT PEOPLE
Bert & Eleanor Harris
By Pete Smith

This essay (Word document above) was published by my older brother Pete Smith in the August 2026 issue of Warrenton Lifestyle, a magazine published in Warrenton, Fauquier County, VA.

It is notable that my brother — who majored in English — and I had the same outstanding English teacher in high school, Robert W. Tighe.

Mr. Tighe’s influence shows.

I have highlighted in boldface some key passages in the essay.

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Just north of Warrenton, on 900 rolling acres under permanent conservation easement, two scientists have spent the better part of a decade quietly doing something remarkable — turning a small, scrappy nonprofit into one of the region’s most vital centers for ecological research, environmental education, and land stewardship. Bert and Eleanor Harris, Co-Directors of The Clifton Institute, deserve far more recognition than they typically seek.

Their credentials alone are impressive. After earning his B.S. in Ecology and Biodiversity at Sewanee: The University of the South, Bert completed a Ph.D. in Ecology and Evolutionary Biology at the University of Adelaide, Australia, followed by a postdoctoral fellowship at Princeton University. Eleanor’s path was equally distinguished but charmingly indirect: she earned her B.A. in Mathematics at the University of Chicago, then — rediscovering a childhood love of animals — completed a Ph.D. in Quantitative and Computational Biology at Princeton, followed by a postdoctoral fellowship at the University of Maryland.

What they’ve built together at Clifton is a place that operates at the intersection of science, education, and conservation in ways that are rare for an organization of its size. Bert directs a program of ecological research aimed at providing actionable recommendations to landowners, working with his team to restore native plant and animal communities on the Institute’s 900-acre property — translating findings from peer-reviewed science into practical guidance for farmers and landowners in the Piedmont community. Eleanor oversees all of the organization’s activities as Co-Director, with a particular focus on education and development.

The numbers tell part of the Institute’s story. Staff have documented 2,600 different species on the property, and the Institute holds the largest dataset in the world on kestrel movements — a distinction remarkable for an organization rooted in Northern Virginia. Last year, more than 3,000 students came through Clifton’s education programs, experiencing firsthand what it means to walk through native meadows, observe raptors in flight, or press a wildflower seed into restored soil.

But perhaps what distinguishes Bert and Eleanor most is their philosophy. Before coming to Clifton, Bert observed that too much conservation biology is published in papers that nobody reads — and they’ve spent their tenure here correcting that. Programs range from field trips and summer camps to natural history lectures, nature journaling workshops, and an annual Native Plant Sale. The research they commission is carefully chosen: targeted projects that benefit how landowners can manage their land, not abstractions for distant audiences.

Fauquier County and the broader Northern Virginia Piedmont are richer — ecologically and communally — for the work Bert and Eleanor – and now their daughter Thea – have poured into this place. In a region under relentless development pressure, they tend to 900 acres of living, breathing evidence that conservation and community can grow together.

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In my post

Learning How to Write

Learning How to Write

I wrote:

Mr. Tighe said that there were three elements to good writing: unity, coherence, and emphasis.

The second element, coherence, Mr. Tighe explained that this was sort of like glue.

You had to tie all your paragraphs and sentences together by using transitional words that guide the reader: on the other hand, in contrast, furthermore, however, and so on. I got the idea quickly and was soon larding my essays with such words. It became a little heavy handed.

When I became a more experienced writer, I learned that you can achieve this in more subtle ways.

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My brother Pete obviously learned this.

Subject to strict word limits (space limitation), he has written an interesting essay that flows naturally.

With smooth, effective transitions.

That is not a boilerplate summary or report.

The article holds the reader’s interest — because the author, Smith, makes it a point to tell us why he is mentioning this or that.

You would be surprised how many writers never do this.

It is done in the transitions.

For example:

The numbers tell part of the Institute’s story.

But perhaps what distinguishes Bert and Eleanor most …

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I am attaching here an article I wrote for New York Newsday, in which. I achieved the same things as my brother did. I made it interesting by showing readers why the doctor and his career were of particular interest.

‘Borough Park Physician Retires After 60 Years’

 

— posted by Roger W. Smith

   August 2026

a deft turn of phase

 

What was once shocking becomes quaint: That’s how it goes. The Charleston now looks like a silly dance, Elvis is just a sweaty guy, nobody’s fainting while watching screenings of “The Exorcist” anymore and jazz is now the province of TURTLENECKED NERDS. We’re assured there was a time when van Gogh’s paintings horrified audiences, but today reproductions of them hang in college dorm rooms. This process is not tragic; as these things lose their power to shock, they reveal new virtues. Nothing stays boundary-pushing forever. …

— “The Greatest Love Story of All Time Is Also the Strangest,” By B.D. McClay, The New York Times, February 14,  2026

 

— posted by Roger W. Smith

   March 2026

when reporting qualifies as literature

‘A Texas Dad Tried to Kayak His Daughters’ – WSJ 7-6-2025

 

“A Texas Dad Tried to Kayak to His Daughters. The Girls Texted ‘I Love You.’ ”

By Patience Haggin

The Wall Street Journal

July 6 2025

 

A story like this would make Hemingway envious.

 

— posted by Roger W. Smith

   June 6. 2025

How To Write a Eulogy

 

‘Bill Dalzell’

‘Dr. Colp’

 

A eulogy is not a Britannica entry, biographical sketch, or “performance review.”

Avoid negatives, but don’t make things up.

Talk from the vantage point of your personal experience with the subject.

Bring it to life with anecdotes. A eulogy is not a summary. The anecdotal material can be “episodic” and does need to be chronological.

 

— posted by Roger W. Smith

  November 2024

a splendid sentence

 

 

“Schwartz’s poems, especially the later ones, are dated. They groan under a freight of leaden rhymes and — Schwartz had a capacious mind — showy philosophical and literary references, spillover from the overstocked pantry that was his mind.”

— Dwight Garner, “Delmore Schwartz’s Poems Are Like Salt Flicked on the World,” The New York Times, April 8, 2024

review of The Collected Poems of Delmore Schwartz, edited by Ben Mazer

 

— posted by Roger W. Smith

  April 11, 2024

how to write; Exhibit C

 

Ben and Jerry’s – WSJ 3-19-2024

 

Posted here:

Ben & Jerry’s Owner Loses Its Taste for Ice Cream

Unilever plans to spin off its ice-cream business, which includes Magnum and Popsicle, and could consider a sale

By Saabira Chaudhuri

The Wall Street Journal

March 19, 2024

My business journalism instructor, Gilbert T. Sewall, was correct when he observed that the Wall Street Journal is notable for the excellence of its writing per se.

The best term I can come up with to describe this piece is limpid.

Everything is covered, succinctly. The facts have all been reported, are all there.

The business issues are made clear.

A layman (i.e., someone not in the business world) can enjoy this piece. Pithy phrases achieve this result:

Ben & Jerry’s owner Unilever has lost its taste for the business.

Ben & Jerry’s, once regarded by analysts as a jewel in Unilever’s crown, has turned into something of a thorn in its side.

Ben & Jerry’s hasn’t shied away from taking a stand on social causes.

Ice cream has been a tough business for … consumer-goods companies. …

Our high school English teacher taught us about topic sentences. Here we see embedded “topic sentences” that ensure that the reader does not get lost and gets the import of the piece.

 

posted by Roger W. Smith

   March 2024

how to write a book review

 

Exemplified by … MYSELF.

What I would say (advise) is: cover the content of the book, what it’s about, what should be noted.

And: give your reviewer’s opinion of the book and whether it (implicitly) is worth reading.

 

Roger W. Smith review of Arthur Henry bio – Dreiser Studies, winter 2005

 

 

— posted by Roger W. Smith

March 2024

how to write; Exhibit B

 

‘Rare Six-Planet System Discovred in Milky Way’ – WSJ 11-29-2023

 

Posted here is the following article (text plus marvelous photos):

Rare Six-Planet Star System Discovered in Milky Way: Worlds orbiting a sun-like star 100 light-years from Earth could unlock secrets surrounding the formation of our solar system

By Aylin Woodward

The Wall Street Journal

November 29, 2023

https://www.wsj.com/science/space-astronomy/space-discovery-exoplanets-earth-f50ad103?mod=Searchresults_pos1&page=1

 

I have been studying writing all my life. I know a good writer (and good writing) when I see one.

Both the famous ones and writers whom I encounter in my daily reading.

Aylin Woodward is a science writer for The Wall Street Journal. Her work is superb.

 

“A family of six gaseous worlds circling like rhythmic dervishes around a sun-like star will soon help astronomers better understand how planetary systems like our own formed and evolved.

“This newly discovered system, about 100 light-years from Earth, is unusual because its planets orbit a bright host star in a pattern that appears unchanged since its birth at least 4 billion years ago, according to a study published Wednesday in the journal Nature.”

This is a very effective lead. Note how in the first paragraph, in just once sentence, the whole article is “capsulized.” The scope and importance of the subject, the findings, are stated with admirable concision.

The rest of the piece speaks for itself. My high school English teacher would have given it an A+.

 

I know from experience how difficult it is to adhere to word limits and write a brief article which reads well and sustains reader interest, while getting all the facts in (no easy task) and making their significance clear. Often the latter involves quotes — in this case from experts whom the author, Ms. Woodward, interviewed. All the facts and quotes have to be blended in skillfully without interrupting the flow of the piece.

While never losing sight of the overall significance of the findings and their import, This is done by the writer adhering to principles of writing such as unity and coherence

All of the best writers — including novelists — do this: mix the general with the specific. facts (narration) with exposition.

 

— posted by Roger W. Smith

   November 30, 2023

George Eliot — again

 

Life did change for Tom and Maggie; and yet they were not wrong in believing that the thoughts and loves of these first years would always make part of their lives. We could never have loved the earth so well if we had had no childhood in it,—if it were not the earth where the same flowers come up again every spring that we used to gather with our tiny fingers as we sat lisping to ourselves on the grass; the same hips and haws on the autumn’s hedgerows; the same redbreasts that we used to call “God’s birds,” because they did no harm to the precious crops. What novelty is worth that sweet monotony where everything is known, and loved because it is known?

The wood I walk in on this mild May day, with the young yellow-brown foliage of the oaks between me and the blue sky, the white star-flowers and the blue-eyed speedwell and the ground ivy at my feet, what grove of tropic palms, what strange ferns or splendid broad-petalled blossoms, could ever thrill such deep and delicate fibres within me as this home scene? These familiar flowers, these well-remembered bird-notes, this sky, with its fitful brightness, these furrowed and grassy fields, each with a sort of personality given to it by the capricious hedgerows,—such things as these are the mother-tongue of our imagination, the language that is laden with all the subtle, inextricable associations the fleeting hours of our childhood left behind them. Our delight in the sunshine on the deep-bladed grass to-day might be no more than the faint perception of wearied souls, if it were not for the sunshine and the grass in the far-off years which still live in us, and transform our perception into love.

— George Eliot, The Mill on the Floss

MARVELOUS

 

— posted by Roger W. Smith

   June 2023

parallelism

 

‘The ordeals of ‘litel clergeon’* and Cambridge freshman are circumstantially very different, and essentially very much the same.”

— Abbie Findlay Potts, Wordsworth’s Prelude: A Study of Its Literary Form (Cornell University Press, 1953), pg. 283

*a schoolboy in Chaucer’s The Prioresses Tale

 

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A splendid sentence by a magnificent writer.

 

— posted by Roger W. Smith

   March 2023